film idea and script notes for editing

For drama i am in a group with Alice Athaway, Ben Brown and another Ben, and Johnny. I am the editor in the group.

we have decided to develop the idea of a Boxer who has lost his focus and has been losing his fights. all he wants to do is box but he can't seem to find his focus. i have secured a boxing gym in which we can film and we plan to do a recce this week.

The script has been sent (i can't print it at the moment, so it will go on this blog at a later date)

and i had some editing ideas.

1. at the start you see the character fall down in the ring then a bell counts him out. i think the bell should count him out during the fall which should be seen in slow motion, the bell, crowd and count should be heard as a distant echo. this could show that boxing is slipping away.

2. in the script the boxer is seen smoking in the gym... this won't be possible

3. As we are not allowed to show sync dialogue, i think all convorsations should be done as an echo as though he is remembering them rather than the person speaking simply being off screen.

4. At the line "i'll let you box" quick cut back to reality, door slams in his face.

5. during the ballroom scene montage between the gym. i think that all the sound from the ballroom should overlap the gym sounds. this will make it seem more furious and frustrating.

6. i also think that instead of just cutting back and forth between the gym, it should cut back and forth to a close up of his face in the ballroom.

7. i also think heavy breathing should be added that gets gradually louder during the montage, so that when it cuts to him in the gym covered in sweat the source of the heavy breathing goes from frustration to exhaustion....